A puzzle of my puzzling contemplations….

Lies, rules, laws, sins.
cry, fool, flaw, begin.
To many living life,
failing existing moral standards,
time dreams knowledge as nothing.

 

Same poem, different format:

 

Lies,                  rules,                laws,                  sins.
cry,                    fool,                  flaw,                  begin.
To                      many               living                  life,
failing              existing             moral                 standards,
time                 dreams              knowledge        as nothing.

I tried something different with my poetry, and I’m not entirely sure how I feel about it. I wrote this awhile ago, but I was trying to decide if I should post this to the Poets Anonymous facebook page. Generally, I just let myself go with poetry and write as it comes to me. With this one, I worked it out as a sort of puzzle. I’d like some feedback on this. Is it too confusing? Does it bring out any thoughts or ideas?? And if I do post it, do you think I should structure it the first way and see if it anyone comes across the “puzzle” or set it up the second way? I don’t usually ask too much of what others think of my poetry and just let others read it, but like I said, I’m just not sure what I think of this one. So, some honest input would be appreciated.  

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